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09 April 2008 @ 06:47 pm
New Fic: Vox Variorum (NC-17) OT4  
Title:  Vox Variorum
Word Count:  2,765
Rating:  NC-17
Pairing:  OT4
Warnings:  Dirty Talk, Slash/Het Sex
Legal:  None of them belong to me, as you know
Note:  There is a tense shift to the present at the end, which is intentional.  Unbetaed and my first OT4, so play nicely.
Summary:  "It's like phone sex—oh, right, you have no idea.  Just—just start by telling me what you like," Rodney said tapping his earpiece twice to activate the frequency.  Teyla did the same.

This is belated birthday fic for [info]berlinghoff79, written to her prompt.  She wanted:
Teyla and Rodney as the adventurous of the foursome - Teyla wants to try something new.  Cue Rodney.  He proposes phone-sex or rather radio-sex, on the team frequency, and shows her right away what he means - (insert steamy het phone sex) - Teyla likes.

This is what she got:

Vox Variorum

"Now tell me again, Rodney," Teyla asked as she peered over his shoulder, watching his careful hands on the small earpiece.  "This—device will allow just the four of us to communicate?"

"Right.  See, I've set it up on it's own frequency," he explained.  "Which is in a separate and distinct spectrum from that of the other Atlantis comms."

Teyla picked up her earpiece, turning it over in her hand.  "And you are certain no one else will be able to hear us?"

Rodney turned around.  "Yes.  Um, fairly certain, yes—certain."

She eyed him warily.  "Because if—"

"Relax," Rodney said, "it's going to work great.  We can have so much fun with this."

"But we are already in radio contact with one another.  Why do we—"

His eyes shone.  "Just the four of us," he said, making a passable attempt at impersonating Sheppard's waggling eyebrows.  "Want to try a little test run?"

Teyla nodded.  "Do we not need to wait for the others?"

"Nope."  Rodney beamed.  "I've already calibrated Sheppard's and Ronon's radios to receive this particular frequency—did it this morning before they left," he added, answering her questioning look.  He smiled and brushed her cheek with the back of his hand.

She cocked her head.  "Rodney, what is that look?"

"I think you'll like this."  He looked at his watch.  "I don't have to be back to the lab until—you wanna make a little bet on how fast I can get them back here?"

"But John is briefing Major Lorne's unit," she said.  "And Ronon is in the middle of a training exercise."

"Not for long," Rodney snorted, carefully fitting her earpiece for her and then smoothing her hair.

~~~~~

"So, I just start talking, telling you—"

"It's like phone sex—oh, right, you have no idea.  Just—just start by telling me what you like," Rodney said tapping his earpiece twice to activate the frequency.  Teyla did the same.

"What I like?" she asked.

"Yeah, or what you'd like to do—when we're all together."

"I like to watch you and John together," she said and Rodney motioned to her in a strange sign language, which she interpreted correctly to mean be more explicit.  "I—I love to watch you fuck John, but I really love watching the three of you, watching Ronon take you as you suck John."

====

Sheppard stopped in mid-sentence and cleared his throat.  His eyes grew wider by the second.  He was briefing Major Lorne and a group of Marines in the main conference room prior to that team's mission to M7X-820.  A stab of panic gripped him as he looked around the room.  Blank and impassive faces greeted him on all sides.  Apparently, no one else seemed to have heard – was that even possible?  He looked sideways at Lorne.  The Major asked if he was all right.

====

"I watch you sometimes, you and Ronon."  Rodney lowered his voice to the pitch and timbre he only used with the others.  "I love it when you ride his big cock…you just look so hungry for it."  Teyla's throaty sigh echoed through the radio.

====

"Sir?" Lorne repeated.  "Colonel Sheppard?"

"Fine," John snapped, then realizing it was Lorne, said, "Uh, thanks Major, fine.  I'm fine."  He continued on with the briefing as a slow trickle of sweat wound around his neck and over his collarbone. 

====

Ronon rarely saw the ceiling of the gym, and he didn't much like his current vantage point.  The floor was cool and hard beneath him as he looked up, his eyes wide.  He stared at Lieutenant Stockton's outstretched hand as if it were a disembodied appendage. 

====

"I love to see Ronon tease your clit when you ride him, those long fingers—watch him push you over the edge—your body—you're so beautiful when you come.  When he's done, I just want to take you—right then—lick your juices mixed with Ronon's spunk, make you come again."

====

Lieutenant Stockton moved quickly to steady Ronon.  "Dex?  You okay?"

Ronon looked around, wild-eyed, trying to locate the voices no one else could hear.

====

"Yes, Rodney.  I love your mouth on me, you know just where to put your tongue, just how hard and just how fast I like it."

Rodney whispered, "You feel it, don't you?"

Teyla closed her eyes and breathed a heavy "Yes."

"Good.  Touch yourself," he instructed, his breath quickening.  "God, I'd love to feel your mouth on me right now."  His hand drifted to his crotch, fingers tracing idly over the tightening bulge.

"And I, too, Rodney."

"You too what?  Tell me what you want," Rodney coaxed, watching her hand between her legs.

"I want your hard cock in my mouth."

Rodney's moan vibrated through their earpieces.

"Actually, I would like to suck both you and John while Ronon fucks me."

"Jesus, Teyla," Rodney replied breathlessly, hurriedly undoing his pants.

====

Ronon began stowing away his gear, although flinging it would be a more apt description.  "Exercise is over.  Uh, you guys can stay if you like, practice."

Stockton smirked.  "Hey, just because I got in a lucky hit?"

Ronon grunted.  That would never have happened if he hadn't been distracted.  "No, I, uh…just have to go.  Same time tomorrow."  He glared at the Lieutenant.  "I don't think you can do it again," he added as he slung a towel around his neck, picked up his bag and hurried out of the gym.

====

John's words were choppy.  He had to think how to put them in the right order as he struggled through what he hoped was the end of the briefing.  Heat burnt a path over his chest and up the back of his neck.  He didn’t know what was going on, but he sure as hell didn't want to miss anything.  "Major, do you think you can handle it from here?"

"Sir?"

"Well, I've gone over the main points.  You can take it from here, right?" he asked again, looking at his watch.  "The Hasai are great people, they'll love you.  I gotta go."

Lorne appeared confused, but nodded his assent.

~~~~

John and Ronon met up in the hallway of the recently opened residential section.  The section that housed the suite quarters the four of them shared.  They pulled up short, eyeing one another.  "You heard it?" Ronon asked as they made their way to the door.  John nodded.

There was no one in the room when they entered, but Teyla's moans were loud and clear through their radios.  "McKay?" John called out.  "Teyla?"  Ronon pushed past him and headed for the bedroom. 

Rodney was naked – on his knees, face buried between Teyla's thighs.  Small, delicate hands cradled Rodney's head as her hips undulated beneath him.  She arched into him as her orgasm took her, the sound of their passion filling the air.

John watched Rodney kiss and stroke Teyla's thighs, knowing she needed a little time to come down.  Ronon made his way to the bed, shedding clothes as he went.  Leaning down to her, he pulled Rodney up so they could share a kiss.  Ronon liked to taste Teyla on Rodney, liked Teyla to taste herself.

"Hey," John said from the foot of the bed.  He sounded, as well as looked, like the odd kid out after choosing up sides for kickball.  Rodney turned to him as John peeled off his shirt, chin and upper lip still glistening with remnants of Teyla.  John reached for him, taking his mouth hungrily, tongue darting out to capture it all, exploring every corner of Rodney's mouth, which he gave openly, deepening the kiss with an intensity that had John reeling.

Someone reached for John's belt - a large hand, rough but devastatingly soft and easy when the need arose.  Ronon freed him of his thigh holster, twisted the button of his BDU's and pulled down the zipper.  John stripped them off, tossing them aside as he climbed onto the huge bed they all shared.

He leaned over Teyla and kissed her.  Tipping with the shift of weight, John knew Ronon and Rodney were kissing above them.  He imagined those large hands framing Rodney's face, how Rodney would welcome the rough scratch of Ronon's beard.  They broke apart as he straightened up.

"All right, what the hell was all that?" he asked, his voice somewhere between agitated and incredibly turned on.

"New comm frequency," Rodney beamed.  "Only our four radios are able to tune in.  Surprised?"

"Lieutenant Stockton decked me."  Ronon deadpanned.  "Then he had to help me up." 

Teyla giggled and quickly recovered.  "I am sorry, Ronon," she said still smiling.

"And I was addressing two teams of Marines at the time," John cut in.  "It's a damn good thing everyone was paying attention to my face.  I think the sickly green color kept everyone from noticing my hard-on.  Jesus, what were you two th—"

"That's funny," Rodney interrupted, sliding his hand up the length of John's cock.  "I noticed it right away."  He licked the outer shell of John's ear, making him realize that now was not the time for talking.  John's agitation dissolved into Rodney's warm nakedness as he pushed into that big, capable hand.

"Teyla and I had a bet," Rodney whispered.  "I was going to give you guys thirty minutes.  Teyla said less.  I lost, and know what?  I don't even care."  John groaned and turned his head, seeking Rodney's mouth.

~~~~~

Ronon pulled Teyla from the bed and wrapped her legs around his waist.  She opened up for him as he kissed her, begging him to continue his oral explorations.  She arched her back and sighed as his warm, hungry mouth mapped her neck and shoulders.  Arching further, she lifted her breasts – an offering which he accepted, lovingly tonguing her taut nipples, rolling them with the tip before sucking them in, and Teyla felt the pull deep inside her.  She rocked into him, her already-slick lips sliding along the hot, hard dick between them.

"Did you mean it?" Ronon asked her.  He nodded at the other two, who had stopped to watch them.  "You want to suck them while I fuck you?"

"Yes," she panted.  "I want you all to climax together.  I want to feel it on me—everywhere."

There were groans all around as Rodney moved across the bed to the pair, stroking along the center of Teyla's back, tonguing the small dimples above her ass while squeezing both lush cheeks.  John swept her hair aside and nipped at the soft, fragrant skin at the back of her neck while Ronon found her mouth again.

Teyla broke away, but kept her eyes on Ronon.  "Now, Rodney.  I am ready."  Ronon laid her down and hovered over her.  They both watched as Rodney pushed John back as well. 

"She wants to watch us first," Rodney explained to John's quizzical look, and Teyla nodded when John turned to her.  He reached across to stroke her body as Rodney took his cock in hand and licked it from base to tip, teasing the head before plunging down over it.

Teyla's gaze was locked on Rodney's mouth as she felt the warm wet of Ronon's tongue separate her outer lips, searching for the sensitive little nub underneath.  Spreading herself wider, she tangled her tiny hand in the mass of hair to pull him closer.  She moaned as he sucked her clit, teasing it gently between his teeth.  The sensation doubled as John mirrored the action – his hand on her breast, rolling a hard nipple between his fingers.  With her senses flooded, the throbbing between her legs had to be satisfied—

"Now!  Please, Ronon," she begged.

As Ronon lifts himself, he pulls Rodney in for another kiss.  John and Teyla watch as Rodney licks the juices from his face before bending down to take Ronon's cock in his mouth.  Teyla shudders at the sight of Rodney's lips stretched around Ronon, sucking him back to full hardness.  She loves the way Rodney lets Ronon hold him and push into his mouth.

Teyla sighs, welcoming the heat as Ronon enters her and starts his rhythm.  She turns at the sound of John's little whimpers and follows his gaze down his body.  Rodney, once again nursing John's cock, lifts his ass, eager for Ronon's fingers.  John strains with the effort to see, the thick cords in his neck pulse as he watches.  

Ronon backs out, pushing two fingers inside Teyla to coat them before reaching for Rodney, and Teyla echoes the groan as she realizes those fingers are pushing inside Rodney at the same time Ronon shoves back into her, his hand moving in time with his cock – fucking Rodney, fucking her.  Like a concert, each one of them has a different part to play, but everyone knows precisely where they are on the page of the score.  The result is a lovely harmony of movement. 

Teyla grows wetter as John leans in and works her earlobe between his teeth.  He moves to her breast at the same time Rodney runs a hand along the back of her thigh.  She looks down her body at the three of them.  Her teammates…her life mates…these men she's grown to love more than life itself.

John looks up.  "You ready for us?" he asks.  She nods, her words kidnapped by the sudden change in Ronon's rhythm.  John grabs Rodney and they quickly move into position on either side of her.  She immediately reaches for their swollen cocks – hard and wet as she strokes them.  John drags one of the pillows forward and slips it behind her neck.

Leaning to him, she licks the underside of John's shaft, twirling her tongue around the head, teasing it as she teases Rodney with her hand.  Ronon grunts out his approval as she turns to the opposite side and swallows Rodney down. 

Teyla seesaws her way back and forth between them until each man has inched closer and closer.  Resting on the pillow, she needs only to turn left or right, mouthing the heavy cocks as they glide over her lips, her neck, her cheeks.  Close enough now to rub both heads together as she bathes them with her tongue.  Rodney's hands tangle in John's hair and John teases Rodney's nipples, their mouths glued together in a desperate and needy kiss that sends shivers along Teyla's spine.

The room is filled with the scent of sweaty, aroused bodies and the sound of heavy breathing - broken occasionally by whispered endearments and filthy encouragement.  Teyla whimpers as Ronon lifts her legs, holding them fast against his shoulder as he rocks into her.  She cries out as his dick drives deeper and deeper with each thrust, exquisite pressure building up inside her. 

Her sticky juices coat her thighs and suddenly she's right at the edge, her clipped, ragged breath loud in her ears as she fights – a futile battle to maintain control while wanting to let go—to fall.  Her eyelids flutter as a hand closes over her breast.  The hot slide of Ronon's cock pushes her closer and closer, the delicious sound of skin slapping against skin falls around the room – all of it narrowing the center of her universe to the wet, pulsing vee between her legs.  She wants to come, wants her lovers to come.

When Rodney circles her clit with a single wet finger, her body goes still.  She's like charged air before an explosion and when he rolls the swollen nub between his fingers, the combustion completes – wave after glorious wave thunders through her, each spasm twisting her, coaxing her shoulders from the bed. 

She goes limp as Ronon finally lets her legs fall.  He pulls out and quickly straddles her slight frame, pulling on his cock until he's shooting onto her stomach, her breasts.  First Rodney, then John follows.  The tactile thrill of their warm release buoys Teyla through the aftershocks, her body still twitching.  She watches as each man milks every last drop – for her, before taking them in turn to lick them clean.  Then, bringing them all together, they share a kiss and the taste of one another.

Ronon carries her to the shower and when they return, Rodney and John have already straightened the bed.  They're sitting on the foot of it, John practically in Rodney's lap while Rodney shows him how to use the new "toy."

They are going to have so much fun. 

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Cyanne: SGA McShep kissing manip flame[info]silver_cyanne on April 10th, 2008 12:50 am (UTC)
Rodney is evil. Evil, evil, evil and so is Teyla and John and Ronon wouldn't have it any other way. :-) This is sweet and hot all at the same time, thanks for the treat.
neevebrody: sga teyla[info]neevebrody on April 10th, 2008 01:33 am (UTC)
Hee! That was a deliciously mean thing to do, though I'm sure John and Ronon can't wait to return the favor! I'm so glad you liked it.
sardonicsmiley: robotrolecall[info]sardonicsmiley on April 10th, 2008 01:40 am (UTC)
*fans self*

I have a serious weakness of OT4, especially done right. And this most certainly was. Though I did get a little lost at one point: Teyla shudders at the sight of Rodney's lips stretched around Ronon, sucking him back to full hardness. She loves the way Rodney lets Ronon hold him and push into his mouth.

Teyla sighs, welcoming the heat as Ronon enters her and reaches out to John when he starts his rhythm. Looking down her body in the direction of Rodney's moans, she watches Rodney lift his ass higher, eager for Ronon's fingers, his mouth full of John's cock.


I'm still not sure who Rodney was supposed to be blowing? Ronon? John? Both of them? I am probably overthinking the smoking hot sex.
neevebrody: sga teyla[info]neevebrody on April 10th, 2008 01:49 am (UTC)
Thanks so much for your comments. Coming from someone whose fic I admire very much, I'm flattered and glad you enjoyed it.

I agree now that I look at it - thanks for the head's up. I should have written Rodney going back to John. So first, John then Ronon then back to John (I'll fix). Hell, I'm just glad I didn't leave anyone out there dangling. Not overthinking at all, I appreciate it.

And, OMG that icon - made of win!
chaps1870[info]chaps1870 on April 10th, 2008 02:29 am (UTC)
Damn, that was really wickedly smoldering hot.
neevebrody: jr red circle[info]neevebrody on April 10th, 2008 02:04 pm (UTC)
I'm really glad you enjoyed it, thanks!
All I wanted was a pony....: Science is like nerd witchcraft[info]wanted_a_pony on April 10th, 2008 03:07 am (UTC)
OMG. OMG. OMG that was hot. Rodney is a genius & Teyla is his goddess & John & Ronon worshippers. I adore dirty talk & almost-public sex & teasing & really well-done hot TeamSex & OMG you wrote them all in the same story!! I will worship & pet you & massage you with warm oils, yes yes?

Fuck doing taxes. (Umm, on second thought, no. Papercuts notgood ow ow ow.)

I'll be... Oh t'hell with it--bunk's too far away. Don't look if you don't wanna see....
neevebrody[info]neevebrody on April 10th, 2008 02:09 pm (UTC)
*closes eyes* (not peeking much)

I'm really glad this worked for you! Writing the foursome is quite a skill, kind of like one-armed paper hanging! I'm glad you thought I succeeded. Hmmm, massage and warm oils, more OT4 fodder?

And yikes, taxes! Although I still have time, it's not the 11th hour - yet!
Jess[info]greenconverses on April 10th, 2008 03:44 am (UTC)
*brain breaks*

I love good OT4 fic, especially when Teyla's at the center of attention. :D The "phone sex" premise was hot and Rodney's plan was wicked. The scenes with John and Ronon while they were listening were hilarious.
neevebrody: JR bw[info]neevebrody on April 10th, 2008 02:14 pm (UTC)
Oh, I'm so glad you enjoyed this. At first writing it seemed a bit like herding cats, but now that it's done, I think I might write another one sometime. This was written from a prompt by someone and I liked the premise of unsuspecting John and Ronon - they're so much fun to ruffle. Thanks!
Ozsaur: Teyla and Rodney (for my birthday 2007)[info]ozsaur on April 10th, 2008 03:45 am (UTC)
:::goes up in flames::: Whoa! That was hot! I love that Rodney and Teyla are the adventurous ones. You hit my dirty talk kind dead on at the beginning. And the rest-- OMG!!!

I should send you cookies for deciding to post this!
neevebrody: JR bw 2[info]neevebrody on April 10th, 2008 02:21 pm (UTC)
Oooh, cookies!!

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I have a definite dirty talk kink too - I just never think I'm really good at it. Writing a foursome is a logistical nightmare, but once I got the flow going, it wasn't quite so bad. (I might write another one) Thanks again, hon. Your comments mean a lot to me.
scoob2222[info]scoob2222 on April 10th, 2008 04:12 am (UTC)
passes out from the hotness that is this fic
neevebrody: JR Intruder[info]neevebrody on April 10th, 2008 02:23 pm (UTC)
*waves smelling salts* Thanks! So glad you liked.
I'm Mrs Oh-My-God-That Lucy's Shameless.: SGA b&w McKay[info]mf_luder_xf on April 10th, 2008 04:22 am (UTC)
Ronon looked around, wild-eyed, trying to locate the voices no one else could hear.

This image just had me in stitches. LOL
neevebrody: mcshep postcard[info]neevebrody on April 10th, 2008 02:24 pm (UTC)
And you know it takes a lot to distract Ronon! I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
Luna: SGA-I've Got You[info]luna_61 on April 10th, 2008 06:32 am (UTC)
LOL I just love the image of John and Ronon looking around wondering where Teyla and Rodney's voices are coming from and what those voices are doing to them. *g*
Thank you.
neevebrody: mcshep - luna[info]neevebrody on April 10th, 2008 02:25 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I wrote this from a prompt and I was totally taken with the idea of unsuspecting John and Ronon - that was fun. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
berlinghoff79: Sex God[info]berlinghoff79 on April 10th, 2008 04:32 pm (UTC)
You posted \o/
Sequel! Sequel! Sequel! Sequel! Sequel! Sequel! Sequel!

*luvs you very muchly*

Also: Did you pimp it at [info]team_sga yet?

Edited at 2008-04-10 04:45 pm (UTC)
neevebrody: JR postcard[info]neevebrody on April 10th, 2008 05:18 pm (UTC)
Re: You posted \o/
*glomps you*

Well, I guess we do need to find out what John and Ronon do to get them back...

I didn't pimp at [info]team_sga yet because of the AU thing. I wasn't sure we could post anything except the stories/art that were going up on that day.
LadyCat: sga - john full lighting[info]ladycat777 on April 10th, 2008 07:19 pm (UTC)
*swallows*

I'll, um. Just be over here *waves to one side* dead, now, k?

Gnnnng.
neevebrody: JR bw[info]neevebrody on April 10th, 2008 10:04 pm (UTC)
Hee! Thanks - very glad you enjoyed the story and considering the last two devastatingly hot stories of yours I've read, I'm flattered you did.
melagan[info]melagan on April 10th, 2008 08:15 pm (UTC)
That was wicked and I loved every bit of it
neevebrody: JR bw[info]neevebrody on April 10th, 2008 10:08 pm (UTC)
Thanks, hon. John/Rodney is still my first love though and I feel a desperate need to get them back in bed together, soon!
[will fuck for sex]: sg:ngh[info]anatsuno on April 11th, 2008 02:07 am (UTC)
sd,fjdslkgfnnnngh, yes, thank you!
neevebrody: JR Intruder[info]neevebrody on April 11th, 2008 03:16 pm (UTC)
You're most welcome. Thank YOU!
the old briar pipe: teyla[info]briar_pipe on April 11th, 2008 02:23 am (UTC)
Guh.

You've robbed me of coherent speech. Which, you know, I'm actually okay with.
neevebrody: sga teyla[info]neevebrody on April 11th, 2008 03:17 pm (UTC)
Hee! Thank you - so glad you enjoyed it!
Romyra[info]romyra on April 11th, 2008 12:28 pm (UTC)
Oh God...the heat went up my neck so fast with this....oooohh yeah. Nice.
neevebrody: sga teyla[info]neevebrody on April 11th, 2008 03:18 pm (UTC)
I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Thanks.
2of7: Pretty arms[info]2of7 on April 12th, 2008 12:24 am (UTC)
Wow, that was really, really hot.
neevebrody: jr red circle[info]neevebrody on April 12th, 2008 12:59 am (UTC)
Oh, thanks for reading! So glad you enjoyed it. *g*

(love your icon. Rodney's arms *happy sigh*)
Tazzles: spn sam onfire[info]tazzles on April 13th, 2008 03:02 am (UTC)
Rodney's so clever. And devious. I love Teyla's innocence almost, at the start, with the whole concept of phone sex.
Love Ronon's and John's reactions. Very hot.
neevebrody: JR bw[info]neevebrody on April 13th, 2008 04:26 pm (UTC)
Thank you - glad you enjoyed it. I was a little reserved with Teyla because, after all, you wouldn't expect her to start right off talking like a slut. When I think about OT4 (which you know I'm a McShepper at heart) I think of her being kind of fire and ice, a little reserved but able to let go and enjoy when she's the center of attention.
Roxy Palace[info]roxy_palace on April 14th, 2008 08:32 pm (UTC)
Utterly freakin' filty. Yay!
Um...more OT4 please...*shivers with anticipation* You keep making me like stuff I never thought I'd like...*g*
neevebrody: sga teyla[info]neevebrody on April 14th, 2008 09:13 pm (UTC)
I aim to debauch please!! Actually writing this was a logistic nightmare, but I found once I got into it, it wasn't quite so bad. I'm trying to hone my dirty-talk skills. Unfortunately, more OT4 is rather low on the priority pole at the moment, but I'll get there. I promise other good stuff in the meantime.

Thanks sweetie, glad you liked!
fredbassett[info]fredbassett on April 16th, 2008 07:17 am (UTC)
Oh wow, that is one evil idea! I can just picture their poor faces!!!

Gorgeous hot smutty funny fic :)

Loved it!
neevebrody: Team[info]neevebrody on April 25th, 2008 11:10 pm (UTC)
I can't believe I'm so late in responding! Thanks! I thought the scenario was funny and devious, so it was hard to resist. I'm glad you liked it.
Dorie, Ph.D.: Flintgaters -- team[info]sonadorita on May 1st, 2008 07:05 pm (UTC)
I read this a while ago but never commented - sorry! I love this story. It's, uhm... hot. Veeeery hot. And sexy. (See how I become incoherent just by thinking of it? *g*)
neevebrody: Team[info]neevebrody on May 1st, 2008 09:09 pm (UTC)
Thank you! Nicole is to blame - I just couldn't resist that request of hers. *g* I'm glad you liked it.
{insert cleverness here}: teyla[info]ismenetruth on May 5th, 2008 04:47 pm (UTC)
Oh, man, that is hot like burning, and wonderfully in-character with all their interactions. I'll, uh, be in my bunk. Jesus Christ.

Edit: you switch abruptly from past to present tense after "Now! Please, Ronon," she begged.
neevebrody: Teyla Red Dot[info]neevebrody on May 5th, 2008 05:01 pm (UTC)
Thank you very much. I'm really glad you enjoyed it.

As for the tense shift, I mentioned it in my author's note, it was intentional to sort of bring immediacy to the 'climax' of the story. Probably not the best writing form, but I thought the end sounded better, but didn't want to go back and change the entire fic to present. That makes sense somewhere inside my brain. *g*
{insert cleverness here}[info]ismenetruth on May 7th, 2008 06:19 pm (UTC)
*facepalm* That's what I get for skipping the notes and going straight to the pr0n. :)